“Splash”! somebody made me cold i had goosebumps. I got my boat stirs and i started going faster than them when i got far enough. I read on the newspaper “ If you go far sharks appear”! Then i started to get a electric shock! couldn't find the way home.
And i was all by myself. I look behind myself to see if somebody else was there. I saw a dark shadow come behind me.
“Oh my gosh”! I felt scared. If it came up to me when i wasn't looking it would just jump up and eat me! I didnt want that to happen.
I put my life jacket on and i jumped of my boat with a board. I tied a rope on my boat and swam away. I was dog paddling away from the fiercest great white shark. It was coming closer. Then i fell down and i couldn't breath. I looked back wards.
Then i saw it eating my food and i swam away. I was looking down at the boat. “OW”! a great white shark bit my leg! I woke up in the hospital. And the doctor said. “You have to stay here for six weeks. Six weeks were gone. I never wanted to swim in the ocean again.
You don't really sound like you are scared at all in your story. You didn't describe what happened when the shark attacked you.
ReplyDeleteHi Hillary,
ReplyDeleteWhat was your reaction when you saw the Shark?
And remember to use a Capital letter for "I".
Maggie,