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Wednesday, 4 March 2015

My holiday at the beach

At the beach it was a bright sunny day. As I was nearly by the water,the brown sand was squishy and wet, with beautiful shiny shells. People were making flags on the wet sand. They were getting seaweed, and shiny shells. The crashing waves were coming, people pretended to scream and run away. I dived under the moving water. I quickly got my beach goggles on to dive under the salty sea. Under the water I saw goldfish, more shells and anemone homes. When I got out of the sea I saw star fish and crabs in the rock pools. And people sunbathing. I look up in the sky the clouds moving slowly like a snail And the bright, sun upon the sky. Little children were burring their dad, And I could smell the barbecue frying the sausage rolls. Life guards up the beach balcony, with strings for people that drowned . Three teenagers were walking around eating cookies and cream ice- cream. And mums and dads rubbing sunscreen on their babies so the sun doesn't burn their babies skin. My walk was nearly over. I walked to my house front door.

6 comments:

  1. I like your description of a day at the beach. You have included lots of different ideas about what we might see there. You have described some of them very well, like the clouds moving slowly like a snail. Lovely work.

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  2. I like your beach description. You have described some thinks very well

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  3. Thanks People! : ) By Hillary

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  4. Hi my name is Elizabeth, I really liked how you've described some things in your story really well,but i recommend that you check if full-stops are in the right place and if the spelling is right but overall it's great writing!!

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